Band 7 You need to take some time off from work to go on holiday. Write a letter to your direct manager. In your letter: Ask for time off and explain why Provide the dates and times for which you will be unavailable to work. Describe what you will do to prepare or make up for your absence. Solved
You need to take some time off from work to go on holiday. Write a letter to your direct manager. In your letter: Ask for time off and explain why Provide the dates and times for which you will be unavailable to work. Describe what you will do to prepare or make up for your absence.
Dear Mr. Sharma,
I am knanal Kaur, one of the employees of your SaskPower Company. I have been working here since 2018. Since I started my job, I have never taken a single holiday and have been working continuously with dedication and determination. Now I want to take a small break from my hectic schedule and want to go on a family trip so that I can spend quality time with my loved ones. Also, the birthday of my younger daughter is approaching on 17th May, so I want to celebrate her birthday at a special place.
In order to fulfill my desire, I need some days off from my job, particularly from 15th May to 21st May. I will continue my work from 22nd May again. It's a matter of just one week because we have decided to explore the beauty of Alberta and celebrate her birthday at a renowned hotel of Alberta, so we will have to travel a day as it's quite far from my hometown.
I am very committed to my job and do not want to miss even a single meeting. I will attend all the meetings online, so please keep sending me all the details of meetings at least one day before so that I can arrange things accordingly. I assure you that I will complete my pending work within 2 days after returning from trip by working overtime as I do not want to disappoint you even once.
I hope you will understand the situation and grant me leave for one week.
Yours Sincerely,
Kanal Kaur.
Grammar Summary
9 errors detected: 2 spelling, 3 capitalization, 2 grammar, 1 punctuation, 1 informality.
Detailed Feedback & Recommendations
The letter fully addresses the prompt by requesting time off, explaining the reason, providing specific dates, and detailing preparations for the absence. The tone is appropriate for a formal request to a manager. The details are sufficient and relevant, and the word count meets the requirement. Minor improvements could be made in clarity and phrasing.
The letter has a logical flow and clear progression from the request to the details and preparations. The opening and closing are effective, and there is a good use of linking phrases. However, some transitions could be smoother, and a wider variety of connectors could enhance coherence.
The vocabulary is varied and mostly appropriate for a formal letter. There are some natural letter phrases, but a few awkward phrasings and minor spelling errors ('knanal' instead of 'Kanal') affect the score. The spelling is generally accurate, but attention to detail is needed.
The letter demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with mostly accurate usage. However, there are minor errors and awkward phrasings that affect clarity. The errors are not frequent enough to hinder understanding but should be corrected for a higher score.
Grammatical Errors
Error: "I am knanal Kaur"
Explanation: Spelling error in the name.
Correction: "I am Kanal Kaur"
Error: "so please keep sending me all the details of meetings at least one day before so that I can arrange things accordingly"
Explanation: Awkward phrasing and redundancy.
Correction: "so please send me the meeting details at least one day in advance for proper arrangements"
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Task Achievement
Addresses The Task Fully: 8
Clear Purpose & Tone: 7
Relevant Details: 8
Fits Appropriate Length: 8
Coherence & Cohesion
Logical Flow: 7
Clear Opening & Closing: 8
Linking Phrases: 7
Paragraph Variety: 6
Lexical Resource
Varied Vocabulary: 7
Accurate Spelling: 6
Appropriate Phrasing: 7
Grammatical Range
Complex Structures: 7
Accuracy: 7