Band 6.5 - Five Months Ago, You Started Renting An Apartment On A Six-month Agreement

? Submitted Task 1 Letter Prompt

Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner. Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter say how long you now want to rent the apartment for explain why you plans have changed tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

Letter Reviewed

Dear Mr. Tweedy,

I am writing regarding the rental contract of the apartment, which I wish to renew for another six months. Currently, I am enrolled in a program in the nearest college to the apartment, which was supposed to finish in six months. Recently, I found out from the college administration that students can add some additional subjects related to their program and finish them together in one year. I am planning to add some extra subjects, which can be really beneficial for my career in future as well as improve my technical skills.

However, I would be greatly thankful to you, if you renovate some of the areas in the apartment before extending the lease. Firstly, there has been some issues with the washroom and kitchen taps, they keep on leaking even after closing them tightly, need some attention from a plumber. Furthermore, garbage picker needs to get contacted by you, as he never comes on the scheduled time to pickup the garbage bags. I have already shared a word with him several times, but somehow he keeps on repeating the same thing.

I hope I hear back soon about the lease decision and other suggestions.

Yours sincerely,
Prachi Diwedi

Grammar Summary

8 errors detected: 2 grammar, 2 informality, 2 spelling, 1 punctuation, 1 spacing.

CEFR Level: B2 - Upper-Intermediate

To improve, focus on expanding your vocabulary with more precise and varied terms. Practice using synonyms and more natural phrasings in your writing. Reading more advanced texts can also help you become familiar with higher-level vocabulary.

Detailed Feedback & Recommendations

The letter effectively addresses all points of the prompt: it states the desired extension period, explains the change in plans, and mentions a problem in the apartment. The tone is appropriate for a semi-formal letter to a landlord. However, some minor issues with clarity and phrasing slightly detract from the overall quality.

ℹ Clarify the explanation for the change in plans to make it more concise and direct. For example, instead of 'Recently, I found out from the college administration that students can add some additional subjects related to their program and finish them together in one year,' you could say, 'My college has extended my program by six months, allowing me to take additional subjects.'

ℹ Ensure all details about the apartment problems are clearly stated. For example, specify the exact issues with the taps and the garbage pickup schedule to avoid ambiguity.

The letter has a logical flow and effective opening and closing salutations. The use of linking phrases is adequate, but there is room for improvement in variety and accuracy. The progression of ideas is clear, but some sentences could be more smoothly connected.

ℹ Use a wider variety of linking phrases to improve cohesion. For example, instead of 'However,' you could use 'Nevertheless,' or 'On the other hand,' to add variety.

ℹ Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. For example, add a sentence at the end of the first paragraph that leads into the discussion of the apartment problems.

The vocabulary is adequate but somewhat repetitive and lacks precision in places. There are some awkward phrasings and minor spelling errors. The letter could benefit from more varied and precise vocabulary.

ℹ Replace repetitive phrases with more varied vocabulary. For example, instead of 'some issues,' use 'specific problems' or 'certain difficulties.'

ℹ Avoid awkward phrasings like 'garbage picker needs to get contacted by you.' Instead, say 'the garbage collector should be contacted by you' or 'you should contact the garbage collector.'

The letter contains several grammatical errors and awkward structures that affect clarity. While the range of structures is adequate, the accuracy needs improvement.

⚠ Correct the grammatical errors to improve clarity. For example, 'there has been some issues' should be 'there have been some issues.'

ℹ Use more complex sentence structures to demonstrate a higher level of grammatical range. For example, combine simple sentences into compound or complex sentences.

Grammatical Errors

Error: "there has been some issues"

Explanation: Subject-verb agreement error.

Correction: "there have been some issues"

Error: "garbage picker needs to get contacted by you"

Explanation: Awkward phrasing and passive voice misuse.

Correction: "you should contact the garbage collector"

Error: "which was supposed to finish in six months"

Explanation: Tense inconsistency.

Correction: "which was supposed to have finished in six months"

Letter Type: Semi-Formal Letter

6.5

Overall Band Score

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Task Achievement

Addresses The Task Fully: 8

Clear Purpose & Tone: 7

Relevant Details: 7

Fits Appropriate Length: 8

Coherence & Cohesion

Logical Flow: 7

Clear Opening & Closing: 8

Linking Phrases: 6

Paragraph Variety: 6

Lexical Resource

Varied Vocabulary: 6

Accurate Spelling: 7

Appropriate Phrasing: 5

Grammatical Range

Complex Structures: 6

Accuracy: 5

Grammar Summary

Detailed Feedback & Recommendations

Grammatical Errors

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