Band 5.5 - A foreign friend of yours plans to visit your place and stay with you, but you do not have time on that date. Give your friend another alternate date to come. In your letter, you should: apologise for it explain how you will be busy on that date suggest to him/her an alternate time to come. - Solved
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A foreign friend of yours plans to visit your place and stay with you, but you do not have time on that date. Give your friend another alternate date to come. In your letter, you should: apologise for it explain how you will be busy on that date suggest to him/her an alternate time to come.
Dear friend,
I am fine here and hope you are sailing in the same boat. How are your parents? It has been a long time since I met them.
I received your message yesterday, and honestly, I am pleased that you finally got the time to plan a visit. Unfortunately, the dates you suggested are not comfortable with me. I have a couple of exams during that period, and it will be difficult for me to entertain you. I am really sorry about this. I know we both have been planning this for a long time and when it is initiating I am not available.
However, my exams will be over by the end of the month and will have a long break. It will be good if you can postpone your visit to next month. I will be starting of spring season, so we can take advantage of outdoor activities, there is a recently opened theme park where we can go for fun.
Again, sorry for ruining your plan.
See you soon!
Kind reagrds
7 errors detected: 1 capitalization, 2 informality, 3 grammar, 1 spelling.
In-depth Feedback
The essay partially addresses the task by apologizing for the unavailability and suggesting an alternate date. However, it includes irrelevant details about the friend's parents and the theme park, which detract from the main focus. The letter is somewhat coherent but lacks precision and formal structure. The vocabulary is basic, and there are noticeable grammatical errors. Overall, the response is relevant but underdeveloped and includes unnecessary information.
Detailed Recommendations
The essay partially addresses the task by apologizing and suggesting an alternate date but includes irrelevant details. The focus is on explaining unavailability and proposing a new date, but the inclusion of unrelated information lowers the score.
The letter has a logical flow but includes unnecessary details that disrupt coherence. The introduction and conclusion are present but could be more focused. Linking words are used adequately, but the variety is limited.
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with some awkward phrasing. Spelling errors are present, and collocations are not always natural. The lexical range is limited.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and lacks complex sentence structures. Simple sentences dominate, and errors affect clarity.
Grammatical Errors
Error: "I am fine here and hope you are sailing in the same boat."
Explanation: Awkward phrasing and incorrect idiom usage.
Correction: "I hope you are doing well."
Error: "Kind reagrds"
Explanation: Spelling error.
Correction: "Kind regards"
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Task Achievement
Addresses The Task Fully: 5
Offers Clear, Developed Ideas: 5
Provides Relevant, Specific Support: 4
Fits Appropriate Length: 6
Coherence & Cohesion
Progresses Ideas Logically: 6
Clear Intro & Conclusion: 5
Uses Cohesive Devices Well: 6
Varies Cohesive Devices: 5
Lexical Resource
Varied Vocabulary: 5
Accurate Spelling & Formation: 4
Collocations: 5
Grammatical Range
Mixes Simple & Complex Forms: 4
Accurate Grammar: 5