Band 6 Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others believe that zoos are useful for protecting rare animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Solved
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Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others believe that zoos are useful for protecting rare animals. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Zoos are there in many places, but people have different thoughts about them. Some say they are cruel and should close, while others think they help rare animals. I will discuss both views and give my opinion.
People who don’t like zoos say it’s bad for animals. They are kept in cages, not free like in jungles or forests. This make them sad—lions or birds can’t roam or fly much. Also, some zoos only want money from visitors, not care for animals. I saw once a bear in small cage, looking bored, and it didn’t feel good.
But others say zoos are helpful. They protect animals that are rare, like pandas or cheetahs, which can die out in wild. Zoos give them safe place to live and have babies. Also, people learn from zoos—children see animals and understand nature better. My cousin went to zoo and liked it, said he want to save tigers now.
In my view, zoos can be good if they do right thing. They should make big space for animals, not small cages, and focus on saving them, not just show. I think closing all zoos is not best—some animals need help. So, better zoos are answer, not no zoos. What you think about this?
In-depth Feedback
The essay addresses both views and provides a clear opinion, but lacks depth in arguments and examples. Vocabulary and grammar are adequate but not sophisticated.
Detailed Recommendations
The essay discusses both views and gives an opinion, but arguments are somewhat superficial.
The essay has a logical structure but lacks variety in linking words.
Vocabulary is functional but lacks sophistication and precision.
Grammar is generally accurate but lacks complex structures.
Grammatical Errors
Error: "This make them sad"
Explanation: Subject-verb agreement error.
Correction: "This makes them sad"
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Task Achievement
Addresses The Task Fully: 7
Offers Clear, Developed Ideas: 6
Provides Relevant, Specific Support: 5
Fits Appropriate Length: 7
Coherence & Cohesion
Progresses Ideas Logically: 7
Clear Intro & Conclusion: 6
Uses Cohesive Devices Well: 5
Varies Cohesive Devices: 5
Lexical Resource
Varied Vocabulary: 5
Accurate Spelling & Formation: 7
Collocations: 6
Grammatical Range
Mixes Simple & Complex Forms: 5
Accurate Grammar: 7